Once I had made my script for our film Project R, I needed it to be checked by Natalia Frain-Gutierrez who has the job of director. Which allows her to alter the script where it would be able to adhere to her vision. I not mind, and accept the cuts that she made to the script in order to make the the opening scene fit within 2 minutes. However, one criticism I would give would be the ending. I feel as though Ralivia waking up from a nightmare does not fit in with the context. It would be as though her dreams, which I am guessing are her memories, are not actually helping her, they make her sad and scared. It completely defeats what we, Romina and I, are trying to send to the audience. This being that her reminiscing is enabling the surmount amount of pain that she is being subjected to.
It is obviously bias to prefer my own work compared the the adjustments made by another, however I don't feel as though it truly fits. I think that her screaming from a locked metal door resembles a thriller much better compared to her waking up. This would be because it is scarier as to what is happening, "why is she screaming?" "why is she locked up?" "would she ever get up?. Whereas her screaming from a dream would just ask "why was she screaming?", "what is she screaming about?".
Yet, below is the finished screenplay. Even though i may not agree with the adjustments, I do feel as though the screenplay is written perfectly. It has included not only what the characters would say, but also what they would wear, the setting - what's in the scene - and the room - whether it's shot from inside or outside. The best thing about this is that the whole thing is condensed, and not as wordy as mine.
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